Reword thesis?

for my essay, the first sentence of my conclusion is supposed to be a creative rewording of my thesis....





i am having difficulties coming up with this sentence.


my thesis is:


Since Lily was abused at an early age for many years, the abuse she bears can be seen clearly in how she acts.





any suggetions?

Reword thesis?
since lily endured abuse for many years starting at a very young age, her actions clearly portray her afflictions.


idk if thats better or worse..


hopefully better :]
Reply:Lily%26#039;s actions are more like reactions from the years of abuse she has dealt with from an early age.
Reply:The behavior of any person depends largely on their history, in Lily%26#039;s case her history is easily readable in her actions. Years of abuse have distinctly shaped her behavior in several ways.
Reply:First, no offense, but your thesis could use a little work. At any rate, It would not be %26quot;since...%26quot; It would be something like %26quot;Lily was (physically?) abused at an early age and this experience has a definite effect on her behavior.%26quot;





And to reword, just restate... In the final paragraph, start out.%26quot; Lily%26#039;s behavior is clearly a result of the childhood abuse she suffered...%26quot; or some such thing.





Trust me, in HS I had Advanced Placement English and we read a book a month and did a paper a month. I got great at writing papers in what my teacher called %26quot;The 5 paragraph structure%26quot;


1P Say what you%26#039;re gonna say


2-4p Say it


5th P Say what you said





Easy-peasy!
Reply:In how Lily acts, you can see she was abused at an early age for many years.
Reply:The way Lily acts is clearly a direct reaction to the abuse she bore for many years as a young child.





hope this helped!





goodluck! I%26#039;m working on my senior thesis (under graduate) and it%26#039;s super stressful!!!
Reply:The indignations and abuses Lily suffered have manifested into detrimental behaviours as a young adult.
Reply:Lily%26#039;s adult (or current, or teen or something) behavior evidences (or demonstrates or illustrates or shows or somethign) the abuse that she endured (or suffered) for several years as a child.





(My parenthetical suggestions are for you to pick the appropriate word, given the context of your paper).





Good luck!
Reply:It doesn%26#039;t necessarily have to be a rewording, rather more of an understanding of what you have written. Maybe something like this.





Even though she tried to hide them, Lily%26#039;s scars from her childhood abuse never disappeared.





I guess that is a rewording...whatever.
Reply:Lily%26#039;s actions reflect the abuse that she suffered from at an early age.
Reply:Lilly%26#039;s abuse is evidently portrayed in her actions as a result of her abuse for many years in childhood.
Reply:Lily%26#039;s actions are evidentially a result of her long and early years of abuse.



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