Please, Please read my Harry Potter fanfiction! I think it's good!?

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2919219/1/





Here is a brief description of it: Harry is a girl. Her name is Adrianne Lily Potter. It takes place in her 6th year. Snape recieves a letter from Voldemort saying that he will kill Adrianne. So Snape shows Dumbledore the letter and then Dumbledore, Snape and McGonagall make up a plan to %26#039;spy%26#039; on Adrianne 24-7 to keep her safe! So they end up seeing her kiss people and all kinds of other stuff! It is funny, but there also are some serious parts, like I kill of **** ****** in chapter 4! Read to find out who it is! I am desperate to have more people read my story so please give it a chance. My chapters are REALLY short so bear with me! LOL! If you enjoy HP fanfics then please read b/c I think you really will like my story! And even of you don%26#039;t like my story you will at least have found an awesome fanfic site! So please give my story a try! Thank you, thank you, thank you anyone that bothers to read it! :)

Please, Please read my Harry Potter fanfiction! I think it%26#039;s good!?
The plot is extremely cliche (especially in the Potter fandom) and it doesn%26#039;t look like you%26#039;ve done much to improve on it. It%26#039;s nice that you use understandable English and paragraphs (however short they may be) but by chapter three you toss it all out and just have dialog. NOTHING kills a story faster than the author trying to drive it through with pure dialog. Use descriptions, paragraphs, go off on a tangent! Anything as long as it creates substance.
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Reply:hey,sorry but when i tried it said nothing.....sorry ,but i bet it would have been one of the best story%26#039;s around here,and from your description it seemed really funny, anyway to the point, i think you%26#039;ll be a great author.Good Luck!



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